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For writing this term we have been working on speeches and making a 1 minute speech and a 3 minute speech. I did my speech on Benji Marshell. Here it is

My speech is on Benji Marshell. Benji Marshell is an nrl player and he is one of the best. He has been noted for his attack, including side steps and flick passes. He is a good playmaker. Benji Marshell was born on February 25th 1985 in Whakatane, New Zealand. In Benji Marshell’s early life he was raised without his biological father. He went to Whakatane Intermediate. He was the oldest of three brothers.

Marshell made his debut on the 27th of July 2003 at the age of 18 against a team called the New Castle Knights. They won the match 52-12. In 2004 Marshell started in the pre seaon world Sevens competition helping the tigers win. In 2005 Marshell injured his shoulder in the opening minutes against The cow boys. Then in 2006 Marshell made a comeback game just to get his check bone broken it must of been a hard time for him then.

Benji Marshell is a kiwi and every year New Zealand face Australia and Marshell is the captain for the kiwis. In 2005 The tigers won the competiton with a little magic from benji Marshell with a pass out the back.

Halfway through Benji’s coach announced his plan to move Marshell to halfback. Marshell didn’t waste anytime in his new position by helping the team beat the roosters 40-24.

Now Marshell is playing in 2011 and the tigers are currently coming 8th. Thank you for listing to my speech. For my speech I think I needed to work on hooking people in the start and making a good conclusion

We have been making expositions this is my first exposition which I didn't do to well in:

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I disagree about school finishing at 4:00pm. Because other people have training and games like futsal or other things. Students will get tired having to learn so long then have to learn late. Students will get hungry because we have lunch at 12:00pm so they will get hungry. If it is winter it will be dark when you get home and you wont have much time to do your homework. Your practices will be late and it will be cold. Sometimes you will have to walk home and it will be dark. =====

I needed more info and I needed to sort them out in paragraphs. I needed a conclusion and a hook in sentence.